Roo 2

Aloha, Serena! It’s me, Roo! :smt039 Get ready for the critique of lifetime! First of all, I’d like to congratulate you---you said this was your first attempt at writing a ...

Hello. Interesting beginning, you have a lot going with these two characters that makes the reader want to know more, I'm very intrigued with them and the world that they ...

Hey, I’m Roo! So far, your story sounds pretty interesting, and I’m definitely wanting to read more when you post it. (That’s a subtle hint for you to definitely PM ...

Alright, alright, there was some stuff I liked about this chapter. You kept your voice very constant and unfailing throughout the whole piece, you kept your writing as nice and ...

Okay, great! I’m very, very interested so far and it sounds like you’ve got a really fresh, unique idea! This is only your second try at writing? Wow! I’m impressed!! ...

I'm sorry--I don't have time for a proper critique or review, so all I can say is: wow. Great! I'm so intrigued, I can't wait till you post more, you've ...

Hey! I just got finished reading your prologue and then came over here, so I'm going to sort of lump them together, okay? I really don't have a lot to ...

Okay, I agree, I also think this is going a lot too quick. Your chapters are 1 or 2 pages long, but it seems like you're already halfway through the ...

Okay! I just posted on your chapter one without reading this and I said that you might want a little bit before the story gets going to get to know ...

Ooh. This sounds very very interesting! So far, it's very original and unique, which---in a time where everything seems to have already been written---is a difficult thing to have. So, ...

Ahh, gorgeous!! (I feel sort of like when you watch a chick-flick nd afterward you look at girlfriends all teary-eyed and go "Kee-yuuute!" If you know what I'm talking about, ...

Okay, okay, you're off to a good start! :D So far I'm really really liking your style and writing pattern, and you stay pretty much consistent with your voice which ...

Pretty, sweet, simple: I liked it! For one thing, you seem to have mastered these two characters' dialog, it sounds easy, natural. That's hard to do. Also, you have a ...